#1
I think it sounds pretty good
feedback and crit please



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2 times, then

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#2
some time would help. like note lengths, cause right now its just a bunch of notes....

but that aside, it sounds pretty okay. see what you can do with it.
...Nothing you've ever...
...Planned on ever turned out...
...The way you planned...


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