#1
Hey,
This would be my second song I've ever written first one can be found as "Better times will come".

Could it be that - Meh. Style Rock-Hardrock.


Could it be that,
you were only a fake, made me a victim of one of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only being used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just some fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made your own sweet disguise

You've put me through so much missery.
You even tried to take me down.
It is all said and done and look.. Look what I've become now!

You've caused so many sleepless nights.
They made me realise, This isn't even worth a fight,
and that was when I made up my mind, that I'd just try again!

Could it be that,
you were only a fake, making me a victim of one of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only been used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just another fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made up, your own sweet disguise?

Yeah I guess I was just a fool.. Lies aren't ment to be true.
This was just a waste of time,
Now lets get in back of line, And try again.s

Could it be that,
you were only a fake, made me a victim of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only being used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just some fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made your own sweet disguise

[Guitar-solo]

[Music becomes calmer]

My memories are tearing me apart, they're to clear.
They make me curious, will I be fine, once I've turned back time.
Or should I leave it all behind, try to regain some peace of mind and
Is it all even worth a try...
Ah well... It seems I'll just have to go back in line.


Thanks for reading!
#2
Quote by Scarlatti
Hey,
This would be my second song I've ever written first one can be found as "Better times will come".

Could it be that - Meh. Style Rock-Hardrock.


Could it be that,
you were only a fake, made me a victim of one of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only being used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just some fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made your own sweet disguise
(Not sure on this, after could it be that the lyrics feel quite long, and theres a few spelling mistakes)


You've put me through so much missery.(misery)
You even tried to take me down.
It is all said and done and look.. Look what I've become now!
(Feels forced agian here)

You've caused so many sleepless nights.
They made me realise, This isn't even worth a fight,
and that was when I made up my mind, that I'd just try again! (That I should try again, should not be screamed it would sound better soft at the end of the scream)
(This stanza is pretty good actually hear it being screamed in my head sounds pretty cool)

Could it be that,
you were only a fake, making me a victim of one of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only been used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just another fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made up, your own sweet disguise?

Yeah I guess I was just a fool.. Lies aren't ment to be true.
This was just a waste of time,
Now lets get in back of line, And try again.s
(feels really forced dude, then again, it probably sounds better when sung)
Could it be that,
you were only a fake, made me a victim of the sick games you've played.
Could it be that,
I've only being used, used as a tool, making others think that I'm just some fool.
Could it be that,
you thought up lies, and made your own sweet disguise

[Guitar-solo]

[Music becomes calmer]

My memories are tearing me apart, they're to clear.
They make me curious, will I be fine, once I've turned back time.
Or should I leave it all behind, try to regain some peace of mind and
Is it all even worth a try...
Ah well... It seems I'll just have to go back in line.
(flow is stunted here, would be hard to sing as it is a mouthful)


Thanks for reading!


TBH I'm not really feeling this song buddy, the flow feels off, don't really like the chorus, could be better maybe mix the lyrics in the chorus otherwise its the same thing repeated over and over, as its so large you start to lose interest. The song could be much better dude, try adding different lines in the chorus, and smoothing out the flow and it could be a decent song
The Ripper

Oh the songs Jim, the songs, they'd melt your face!
#3
Cheers, Rokieste. I'll spend some nights on making it flow better, which I should've done earlier.
New version will be up within one month.
#4
I think its a pretty good song...i have a question tho...how do u post a song cuz i keep tryin and i dont know how
#6
Quote by zeppelin_freak0
I think its a pretty good song...i have a question tho...how do u post a song cuz i keep tryin and i dont know how


There is a button above the threads that says "Create thread.
That would be it, insert a title + song and it will be onhere
#7
Good writing but the song is a bit weak. The simple fact is the it relies a lot a on the hook but the hook in itself isn't that good, you should make sure that any hooks a song relies on is extra awesome and catchy ask your buddies or something. Don't train a dead horse.
Still it's impressive that you did managed to put some meaning into it the lyrics were good and I wonder how it would sound to music.