#1
Blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding
O blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding
my soals burning down
as the flames rise above the ground
Black thoughts keep on coming
i keep hopeing hopeing for somthing
Blackend blood when im bleeding
blackend blood is all im seeing
but when im crying its not sadness
its all from the hatered and madness
yeah!! blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding
#2
I'm sorry but your song is really, really cliche. Trying expanding your vocabulary and using more original expressions than black tears.

did you know the major scale on a piano, starting at whatever note (lets say E). you just go straight up the white keys without hitting a black one. and you got the major scale.

#3
I would have to sadly agree with Stacked Actors. This is a very very very cliché piece of writing. This would be nice as like a little icon type thing for aim or stuff, but nothing more.
Sorry dude.
#4
o u got a problem with it. blackend blackend blackend blackend blackend
Last edited by kenny94gg94 at Jan 17, 2008,
#5
Quote by ryan 93
Blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding
O blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding
my soals burning down
as the flames rise above the ground
Black thoughts keep on coming
i keep hopeing hopeing for somthing
Blackend blood when im bleeding
blackend blood is all im seeing
but when im crying its not sadness
its all from the hatered and madness
yeah!! blackend tears when im crying
blackend tears are all im finding

I won't address the cliché of it all, but will suggest that you learn to spell blackened if you plan on using it in your poem that much.
I made you a cookie but I eated it.
#6
dont you understand! He knows how to spell it correctly. Thats how he wants the song.
#7
you are the one that dont know how to spell it
Last edited by kenny94gg94 at Jan 17, 2008,
#8
I'd have to agree with all the collective opinions, work on your spelling and variety.
#9
Quote by kenny94gg94
you are the won that dont know how to spell it


Shouldn't that be "you are the ONE" along with the piss poor grammar?

I hope that was sarcastic

Btw, no double posting!!!

*reported*
Quote by filthandfury
I only do that on MSN, and I get many complaints about it.

F&F will have cyber sex with you on MSN. He's a bit handsy though.


I have become..... METACARPI!!!!

I wish


Joeymaxx