#1
Workhorse Slaving
Blood Sweat n Tears,
Shead to Dispel
All Doubt and Fears.

Enough is enough,
The labour of man,
Workhorse slaving,
With blood on his hands.

Work to provide,
I must do,
Whatever it takes,
To Provide for you.

I do This for You - Screamed and grunted a few times
Workhorse For You - Screamed and grunted a few times

Thanks for checkin it out, its defintly short and sweet, cause its more of an instumental song, like a protest type deal, more featuring breakdowns and solos more then the vocals, but its sung in like a metal scream grunt. but w.e sounds good in you head, lol.
Check out my other new one called a rose in a flame, and Who made you king. thanks and happy writting.
#2
Workhorse Slaving
Blood Sweat n Tears,
i think cutting it down to Blood and tears would work better, or sweat and tears, or just two of hem.
Shead to Dispel
All Doubt and Fears.
lose the "all", flows a bit nicer

Second part is gooood.
I usually dont like rhyme, but it desnt seemed TOO forced so...

last part seemed forced a little, especially the "i must do" but other then that like the message.
I could see this as a metal song, and i like the idea of a scream/grunt.
Ill check the rose one or w.e out if i can find it.
Cheers