hey this is one of my songs comments would be great and suggestion for a song title

she sleeps in her tomb
and doesnt awake
till the break of noon
before day break

she looks in the mirror
theres no refelection
shes a vampire
with no affection

she will rip ur soul out
turn it to dust
the pleasure she gets from turning
love to lust
Sounds not too bad, except for how the first verse makes no sense...I'd change that if I were you.

Edit: Also change the second last line of the song to something more like, "She takes pleasure from" it would make more sense to me anyway.
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Last edited by Blackballed at Sep 26, 2007,
hey thnx yeh i wasnt too keen on the first verse either and thnx for the suggestions