#1
I'm really happy with this song. I'll try to crit 4 crit. 'Lead me to the Gallows' -


Take me down the primrose path
To the place where jesters laugh
Logic of power and the cube or reality
Outrun the storm and break free

Death takes my hand and leads me down the final road
The trail of roses and ash
He’s leading me to the gallows
Theses walls cannot hold me, only my sanity
Death takes a hold, I’m losing control

A chain unbreakable
A place unmistakeable
I’m hunting high and low
Lead me to the gallows

Through the trees shine a ray of the sun

A chain unbreakable
A place unmistakeable
I’m hunting high and low
Lead me to the gallows

On wings as black as deaths
A raven cries at the twilight
One last chance
As the clock hits midnight

Death takes my hand and leads me down the final road
The trail of roses and ash
He’s leading me to the gallows
Theses walls cannot hold me, only my sanity
Death takes a hold, I’m losing control
Losing control!
Raise your chalice my brother
Raise it high
To catch the fire that falls from the sky
#2
Long time no see! I haven't been on here in a long while. Anyway to the crit!!

I really liked your imagery on parts like - The trail of roses and ash
He’s leading me to the gallows

I think that if you added a few more scenic lines and interesting language this peice could be even better. I know this idea has been done before but I still enjoyed it. Maybe add a bit of a twist? 9/10 . Nice work man.

Maybe crit mine? Mourning Creek ( I don't have a link D: )