#1
Hey everyone. I've been trying to write lyrics to my future songs (which are just starting to take shape) and it's taken me about 6 months to write something that I honestly like. This is my first thread in here. It's far from done, I want more, but I just don't know how. Here's what I have:

And sometimes dreams are
Just nightmares in disguise
Can't let it go
Don't want to realize

And sometimes dreams are
Just nightmares in disguise
Down from heaven
Fears will always rise


I'll critique your stuff if you want, but I probably won't be very helpful.
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Last edited by Jack Flint at Sep 28, 2007,
#2
Hmm. I really like the idea you're going for, that dreams can really be nightmares. It's a very smart way of saying "be careful what you wish for." Still, this is ineffective. There's not enough here to really convey your meaning. If you need help getting more just start asking yourself questions. How can dreams be nightmares? What would that do to someone to have a dream turn into a nightmare? Why is it important to let dreams be dreams and focus on reality? Just a few examples. I think you've got a great start, but like you said, it's far from finished.

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