#1
Hope ive posted it right - sorry mods!


Hi guys ive been playing acoustic guitar for about 18 months

I thought hey why not write something so I came up with this - took me about an hour altogether to get it to this (over a few days)

Would love to hear some peoples opinion on lyrics and structure.
I cant sing to save my life so I guess you will have to try and guess how it sounds?!?

Strumming rhythm fairly standard - more up down up down strokes in chorus if that makes sense.

Thanks people go easy this is my first attempt!!! Oh and didnt know if it sounded nicer with Capo on 2nd fret.


Throw It All Away


cadd9.......................dsus..............D

laying on my bed with my mind running wild

cadd9.....................dsus..........D

time passing by all her clothes in pile

cadd9...................dsus................D

thinking about all the good times and bad

cadd9...................................dsus...... ......D

still have those memories of all the fun that we had


BRIDGE

.....Am.............................C
but thats just the way life sometimes goes

............Am.................................... C
when you win some you lose some and your head feels numb

......F ....................... N/C
its a shame that this is the end


Em.........................................G
Pick up Pick up Pick up yourself dont let it get to you

Em..........................................G
Pick up yourself Pick up yourself dont hide the truth

Em............A
another day another game

Em..................A
another story but its all the same

.....Dm.................Am..............E......... ...............E........................E7
She wasnt worth the hassle so dont throw it all away throw it all away throw it all away


instrumental

cadd9.. cadd9.. dsus.. duss.. D


cadd9......................dsus..............D

laying in a field with my heart beating wild

cadd9....................dsus.........D

time passing by as we both get high

cadd9...................dsus................D

thinking about all the good times and bad

cadd9......................................dsus... ....... D

wash away those memories of all the fun that we had


bridge

chorus x 2

on 2nd chorus repeat last line end on one strum E
#3
I actually quite liked this. Obviously I have no idea of melody-but I had a crack at playing it myself and the lyrics give it a good rythmn. The piece is a little simplistic, but sweet and quite well written so it doesnt really make any difference. Its a nice pop song. 8/10

return crit? Ive got a recording up on my profile-and as you can see-singing is not my forte either! It doesnt matter though, You should get some recording equipment and put it up anyway-I'd love to hear this song played by its writer.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=591210
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#4
many thanks for your comment - so you think its a bit too simplistic?

ive uploaded a rough version of it (im singing it very very quietly in parts as i was just following what i wrote so ignore the singing if its audible as im terrible)

Feedback on the melody etc... would be very appreciated!!!


http://www.megaupload.com/?d=79XZE3XB
#5
haha I'd love to listen to it but I cant figure out how! You can upload songs onto your profile here y'know, that megaupload thing is confusing.
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#7
Hey, that works, Its a nice little song, i cant hear any vocals on it anywhere which is a shame because i really wanna hear how the vocal melody goes, but like i said, its a nice chord progression, sortof...melancholy
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#8
the chord goes well.. but i don't get the vocal melody...nice lyrics... how are you going to play this? alone with a acoustic guitar? why don't you add some finger pickings over ur verse chords? anyway good song...love to play it..
#9
Quote by SLAcker_14
the chord goes well.. but i don't get the vocal melody...nice lyrics... how are you going to play this? alone with a acoustic guitar? why don't you add some finger pickings over ur verse chords? anyway good song...love to play it..



Many thanks for your feedback - very appreciated!

Well I like the pure sound of an acoustic so still not sure whether to just have singing and the acoustic. I may fill it in with other bits.

Finger pickin the verse is a good idea! Might have a mess around!