#1
Short poem. Be nice guys.

Play all the chords of my heart
til you snap every string.
Destroy me with every note
til there no notes left to sing.
Am I supposed to find passion in pain?
Music in noise, a melody.
Silence at the sound of your voice
leaves me no choice. Die or leave.
#2
This is the best poem I've ever read, on or off UG. I love the metaphore, and the flow is perfect, I wouldn't change anything about it....i seriously love this poem. Great job
#4
I don't know about it being the BEST on UG, but it pretty good. I would change the fourth line myself, as I don't think you should use the word "notes" so soon after using it beforehand. Maybe something like "til there's nothing left to sing"?
#5
Wow thats exactly what my friend told me, but I used notes twice in a row on purpose. I thought about using nothing instead, but I think it sounds a little better this way. Dunno though. Thanks for the crit.