#1
Going Against The Grain: As They Say

Verse 1:
Insecurities
get the best of me
I’m so unsure
(I’m so unsure)

Put my mind at ease
It’s stable ground I need
I just need a cure
(I just need a cure)

Chorus:
Cause I need some ammunition
Against the fact, that your past, is the blueprint
For your future and what comes next
Cause I need some ammunition
Against the fact, that your past, is the blueprint

Verse 2:
Just look at me now
I know somewhere somehow
It could get worse
(it could get worse)

Treat me like it’s a crime
except different this time
Guilty until
(proven innocent)

Bridge:
I’m sick of always waiting for an accident to happen
Cause it’s not an accident if it’s always in the plan
Life isn’t meant for behind-the-scenes action
I guess I messed that up but better late than...
never
Last edited by itsaforestfire at Oct 4, 2007,
#2
I can see only one or two things wrong with this piece
"Just look at me now, I know somewhere somehow"
Last 4 words of that are in every cliche song ever written. (Or someday somehow... Although I kinda like Nickelback...)

The flow in the bridge is messy, I think it's to do with syllable length but it's late and I'm too lazy to work it out.

I like the rhyme scheme and the general lyrics, especially the first verse and chorus, but space it out more. Present it so it's like this instead:
Insecurities,
Get the best of me
I’m so unsure
(I’m so unsure)

Actually, on second thoughts, it's just as good your way... Don't bother.
I play by my own rules. And I have one rule; There are no rules... but if there are, they're there to be broken. Even this one.


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#3
i think its better than keep repeating its still a little hazy. your structure as whole i like, i also think it could use a third verse.did you write this before or after keep repeating?