Hey guys,
Just thought i'd post something i wrote awhile ago, 2 years to be exact. My vocab was quite small back then but yeah. Its very short and i thought i'd get some more advice before continuing with it.
Crit for Crit
Be as harsh as you want.

The last twist of the knife turned,
Her pale hand gradually burnt.
‘There were other ways to do this’
She muttered with one last kiss.

Without a concern,
She slowly turned.
And with a spirited look,
She secured the hook,
And the story ends,
A a tale of dearest friends.