#1
I don't know what to say about this one... c4c

He gazed at the horse
looked in its mouth and said
"What the...?

Before the first course
before his mouth is fed
"What the...?"

He searches for meaning
Questioning everything
He needs to see it with his eyes
Tell me, is this wise?

He's living up today
no belief in tomorrow
"What the...?"

The abstract is far away
Distance protects him from sorrow
"What the...?"

The word faith has no meaning
To him evidence is everything
and in few but his own eyes
he is wise of the wise

He's tapping his foot now
Invisible force breaks silence
"What the...?"

Music found him somehow
Turns his beliefs to nonsense
"What the...?"
c4c


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So I threw a rock at her.

Fuck heelies.
Last edited by ChickMagnet41 at Oct 9, 2007,
#2
I'm not sure what the meaning is, so if you're trying to have a good meaning, it needs some change. The flow is alright, some parts better than others. Rhyming is pretty good, decent vocab. Good overall.
Your head slowly caves in from the compression
#3
Thanks. Its kinda about how its important to question things but not to the point where you only believe what can be proved and what you can see with your eyes, because then religion and the arts have no place in your life. You're right that I didn't do a very good job conveying the message.
c4c


Quote by ckellingc


So I threw a rock at her.

Fuck heelies.
Last edited by ChickMagnet41 at Oct 10, 2007,