I've been playing for 7 months ( if you care ), just thought if someone could give a comment about my playing, tone, etc. Solo is played with les paul copy ( not epiphone ) and a microcube. It's not probably 100% correct, but what the heck.
Sounds like you know most the parts, just a little choppy trying to go from one section to the next. Keep practicing you'll get it. Pretty good for 7 months.
not a bad start =) just need to work on speeding it up a little and blending all the chunks together. Keep it up, and above all don't give up!
My Setup: Schecter Hellraiser FR, Line 6 Pod XT Live, Line 6 Spider II, Crate Half-Stack