#1
Right, thanks first for looking at this thread. My first album is done...finally and most tracks are on the Dmusic site. I haven't posted on here in AGES till I came across this new song. But it needs something that I can't put my finger on it, from a WRITING point of view.

The quality is lacking because I accidently mixdowned the track at a low quality... and the voice is bad because...well I have not worked hard enough on it yet.

So have a listen, i'll get a better quality version up soon as I can. The song is called 'Closing Thoughts'. So what can I put in there to flare it up and give it some life? Say what you want.

http://lukas.dmusic.com/
Orophin
#3
Sounds good man. I love the way the piano sounds. Keep up the good work
#4
Yeah? But what can I improve save the voice and the quality... ?
Orophin
#5
I think it's a well-played piece. I must admit, I've never been a fan of higher octave piano so I really liked when it dropped around the 1:20ish mark. But around that point, even though the chords have changed, the song is still staying at the same level. I think at that point, some layered vocals would really make your singing pop and it would enhance the chord change by making it stand out more. I'm thinking off-set vocals where a second set is overlapping and filling in the pauses of the main vocals, rather than having them shadow the main vocals, if you need what I mean. I like the subtle percussion and snare crescendo or whatever that is. I like that you added whatever that horn instrument is supposed to be. I'd personally like some acoustic guitar backing it up about halfway through. I think it would add more depth to the sound. I understand what you were going for with the big crescendo at the end, but I think it was still a little thin, IMO, and I'd add some guitar. But overall, I think it's a well-crafted and well-performed piece. Good job.
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#6
Quote by ghettohippygrrl
...some layered vocals would really make your singing pop and it would enhance the chord change by making it stand out more. I'm thinking off-set vocals where a second set is overlapping and filling in the pauses of the main vocals, rather than having them shadow the main vocals, if you need what I mean.


You mean singing something different to what the lead is singing, lyrically I mean. Like 'Ooooo's n 'ahhhhh's and other lyrics taken from th actual piece but sung in a different place? I am actually adding a massive set of vocals on the cresendo, but using loads of different people.
Orophin