#1
ANTI-HERO

The silent screams of slit throats \
Are left on walls in bloody notes \
Prophecy of his return / *whisper*
The Anti-Hero /
The silent screams of slit throats
Are left on walls in bloody notes
Prophecy of his return
The Anti-Hero, Anti-Hero
Return to black
In a violent attack
Severed heads, cut through the bone
Best friend in insanity
Covered in guilt
Laughs and “so f**king what?”
His sword is his whisper
His blade is his voice
Burning his bridges
With freedom and choice
Eyes burning red
With hatred
He’ll slaughter
Every soul in his sight

Cause in this city
Where he was betrayed
Will be their tomb
Will be their grave
Cut the head from the body
And let it all fall

Crack the skulls
Against the cement
Tear the insides out
And stack the bodies up to the sky
Walk through the blood
He laughs at the very sight
His sword is his whisper his blade is his voice
Free of a conscious
Free of remorse
Eyes burning red
With hatred
He’ll slaughter
All the world will repay

Cause in this city
Where he was betrayed
Will be their tomb
Will be their grave
Cut the head from the body
And let it all…
Stain the sky
With the sins
Of the world
On their…

“Hands will be stained with the blood of millions, its their deaths that they control. I serve as the right-hand of God’s ruthless rage and these sins must be paid in full. I can feel their hatred, I can feel their madness, this pain won’t go away. I feed off their lives, my own slice of madness, keeps me cold as a silent night. I wander the graveyards in search for relief; I envy the dead…An APOCALYPSE IS BOOMING IN MY HEAD!!! AS I ANNIHILATE THE WORLD!!!”

Even after I’m dead and buried
I’m gonna get you, I’m gonna get you
Even after I’m dead and buried
I’ll come to get you, I’ll come to get you
Even after I’m dead and buried
I’m gonna find you, I’m gonna find you
Even after I’m dead and buried
Dead and buried, buried…
(Bell tolls, thunder storm in background)


tell me what you think...
P.S: phantom 1 i hate you
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#2
wow, that was quite violent...


His sword is his whisper
His blade is his voice
Burning his bridges
With freedom and choice


i love that part!


um, other than that i don't think i can really critique this. my writing style is so completely different, i wouldn't know what to say about it
#3
ya i don't know why but when i try to write the most metal song in the world it comes out like this.
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#4
...brutal... \m/ \m/

Seriously though, some really nice agressive lyrics and real menace. Few minor niggles IMO:

Burning his bridges
With freedom and choice
Eyes burning red


just a personal hatred of repetition shining through here...

and the continuous verse is a bit bizzare...? to me anyway. Might work well if it was delivered really fast (in the style of Tom Arya of Slayer perhaps...).

Anyway, certainly a gory addition, but interesting nontheless.

C4C?
#6
well god forbid did a song called anti-hero so i thought i could too.
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#7
dude that is a sick song, u should scream the capitolized part it would sound so awesome
LONG LIVE THE METAL
#8
Quote by Res_Shred_Head
dude that is a sick song, u should scream the capitolized part it would sound so awesome
LONG LIVE THE METAL


ya i actually do scream that capitalized part, right after a sort of dark speech in a really deep voice, you know the big part before that. its supposed to be the anti-hero addressing his twisted thoughts in the song.
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#10
Quote by urdad
wow no **** i made a punk song called anti-hero


did you post it on this site? i'd like to take a look at it.
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