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here's my latest piece, it's a little different than most that i write even though i don't write alot. It's a song, but i wrote it without music, or even a melody running through my head so for now, it's just a poem.

Reflections(working title)

The morning before last was the was the darkest I had seen,
Confusion pierced my every thought, my heart, it seemed was gone
For crowds of people left and right, it was just another day
None of them could understand my grief, my pain,

I struggled to keep the storm from breaching my emotions
I fought to forget, move on, and ignore all that had occurred
Despite my greatest efforts my heart was suffering
And all that so quickly happened on the first grey day

I can feel the new dawn breaking
Changing everything,
I long for peace to consume my grief, swiftly
Until then my dear, my love remains
A burden I must carry
My heart it weeps, my soul can’t sleep
For now, at least, I’m broken

Our love was a kind of ecstasy that blinded all our reason
And ignorance is bliss was the cliché of the year
We never realized the hole we’d been digging for ourselves
And when we did we’d gone to far to carry each other out

I can feel the new dawn breaking
Changing everything,
I long for peace to consume my grief, swiftly
Until then my dear, my love remains
A burden I must carry
My heart it weeps, my soul can’t sleep
For now, at least, I’m broken

Here’s to you, my darling
You, I won’t soon forget
Your laugh, your love, your everything
My darling, here’s to you

please, please crit. crit 4 crit.
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