#1
The tears dont last forever
they dry and fall away
you were never just a face to me

you did so much more
than i could give credit for
now the day is at its end


just a little thing i made up; C4C
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#2
Quote by RRRUBEN
The tears dont last forever
they dry and fall away
you were never just a face to me
I like this, but how about 'invert' the last line, to something like "you were more than just a face to me"? Matter of personal opinion, really.

you did so much more
than i could give credit for
now the day is at its end
Like the rhyming couplet, but the last line just seems to be dangling on with no real purpose to being in the stanza.


Short and simple, i like it.

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