#1
Not sure about the title. C4C

i remember, in fondness
as though they were a beloved
now dead, only memories
the days when i knew you so well
that i forgot myself
when you were there, always

you held my hand
as i learned of life
through open eyes

but now you show me how
even while falling down
i am high in my own eyes

there will come a time
when i
will let it all fall through
there will come a day
when i sabotage
this safety chute

soaring straight down
down to earth

the pots and pans go flying out
now strapped to an empty pack
the ground approaches
i brace for impact

but i still know
just like i did, so many hopes ago
my only chance in life
is to let go
We're only strays.
#3
not bad, the only thing I didn't like about it was this part

"there will come a time
when i"

cause it kinda ruins the flow of the song, but other then that great job.
#4
Quote by eltyr18
not bad, the only thing I didn't like about it was this part

"there will come a time
when i"

cause it kinda ruins the flow of the song, but other then that great job.


Maybe if it was written like "there will come a time, when i."

?
We're only strays.
#5
Quote by Martyr's Prayer
Maybe if it was written like "there will come a time, when i."

?


Yea that works, didn't see it that way, so yea, good job.