#1
Well ok this is the first song I have ever wrote. Sure I've wrote bits of poetry here and there but never a full song. So anyone is welcomed to critique it, and by that I mean helpful advice. If you absolutely hate it then fine, but don't flame. ok so here it is

Save Me From The Silence

(Intro)
Closed doors, iron walls
nothing comes in, my thoughts never come out.
My words are without echo,
how could anyone know what I possibly think about.
My mind races, but no one hears,
someone, anyone, save me from the tears.

Save me from the silence,
from the emptiness inside of me.
Save me from this hell,
this internal damnation.
Save me from this hallow shell.
Grab my hand, set me free,
don't let me stay,
please take all the silence away.

The lights go out, the windows slam shut,
I'm stuck here in the silence I've become.
To be with no one, to always be one,
to the world outside me I have been shun.
The walls close in, I start to loose grip,
my mind races but gets to no end.
I'm loosing control, this battle I might not win.

Save me from the silence,
from the emptiness inside of me.
Save me from this hell,
this internal damnation.
Save me from this hallow shell.
Grab my hand, set me free,
don't let me stay,
please take all the silence away

( Solo 1)

My heart pounds, my eyes weap,
my body shivers as the cold surrounds me.
I won't stop trying, I'll always stay strong,
I'll always keep fighting, even as the years grow long.
I won't let the silience consume me,
I'll never give into its torcher,
This war will be won, and I'll be the one to win.
As the walls close in, closer and closer forcing me to crack,
No, I won't give in, I'll be the one to win this attack.

Save me from the silence,
from the emptiness inside of me.
Save me from this hell,
this internal damnation.
Save me from this hallow shell.
Grab my hand, set me free,
don't let me stay,
please take all the silence away

The door shakes, the knob turns,
It opens, ever so slightly, the light shines in,.
What did it take for me to go through,
I've known the answer all along, the key was the inner you.
No more walls closing in, the door finally lets me free,
free to let me be, let me be who I really am, to let me be,
to let me be me.

Save me from the silence,
no more emptiness, inside.
Save me from the silence,
no more reason to sit and hide.
Save me from the silence,
finally able to leave this inner hell.
Save me from the silence,
the silence is gone it will never stay,
Save me from silence,
it's no longer here to keep away,
away,
away,
away.
Save me from the silence.
(End Solo)
#2
Please give the rules the once over, next time you post please make sure it is correct. I've edited your title this time.
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#3
wow. This song is incredible! Just write some music to math the magnitude! Keep it up!
#4
Looks really good. With some good music that could make a great song. Thumbs up.
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#6
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Please give the rules the once over, next time you post please make sure it is correct. I've edited your title this time.


Wow, sorry. My bad it was late at night and I was tired. But for your sake I will strive for perfectionism next time.

Thanks for the positive comments, I will post the music to it when I have it all Completed.