#1
This is a song i wrote after my ex 3 timed me, dumped me and then attempted to get me back.Ouch. Anyway if you crit it or make suggestions, i'll try and do the same for you.

I don't wanna talk this over
I don't wanna be with you
You tell me i'm your only one
What happened to the other two

Did ther realise who you are
Did they realise what you'd done
I'm suprised you can stand at all
With a conscience that weighs a tonne

You lied to me
Then You cheated
You Left Me For Defeated
You Thought I'd Cry Over You
My Heart Would Break
But honey you were nothing but my biggest mistake

Where did i stand in your life
A little something on the side
Was i just a bit of fun
Another piece of all your lies

You think you'll get away with this
That i wouldn't mind at all
You're so wrong i almost feel sorry for you
Cause My Revenge Will Mean Your Fall
#3
I can't really crit this coz I like it. As long as the music does justice to it I think this is good. My only crit is:
You lied to me
Then You cheated
You Left Me For Defeated
You Thought I'd Cry Over You
My Heart Would Break
But honey you were nothing but my biggest mistake

To me, this just doesn't seem to flow. Perhaps you have to say it right, I dunno. Perhaps try this little re-write I've attempted on the spot:
You lied to me
You cheated me
You Left Me For Defeated
You Thought I'd Cry for You
And That My Heart Would Break
But honey you were nothing to me
Except my biggest mistake

Dragging the last line out a little bit
Hope that helps a bit.
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yeah fire him secretly... thats what im doing except im firing myself and secretly joining someone elses band

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thanks for the compliment man!