shuriken
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Join date: Feb 2007
818 IQ
#1
“Where’s my dad? He said I had a dentist’s appointment or something.”

“No,” Eric replied, “I said you had an orthodontist’s appointment.”

Alex was a little slow and took him a while to catch on to the “Grand Scheme” of Eric’s fast-paced lifestyle.

“You called me out of school? Why?”

“Uhh, It’s kinda complicated.”

“Well you’re gonna have to dumb it down for me,” Alex replied.

“Well then,” Eric said, “if you insist.”

Eric went on to tell Alex about the fight with his dad, running from the cops, and how his only sensible choice was to come here.

“So your Dad is presumably dead, you have no money, and came here?”

“Yeah, pretty much.” Eric replied.

“And what do you plan on doing about your Uncle’s SG?”

“F*CK!!”

In the rush of getting out of the house, Eric had totally forgotten about his Uncle Jeff’s SG. It was a natural cherry finish with a neck and fretboard like silk. The day his uncle gave it to him, he said,

“Eric, I’ve watched your playing progress since you started. I think it’s about time I gave you this. Guard it with your life.”

The guitar glistened in the sunlight peeking through his bedroom window.

“He gave it to me before he died. And now it’s sitting in a rundown sh*tty house.”

“Well,” Alex said, “If that house has no legal owner, it’s probably gonna get torn down soon. And if the neighbors noticed nobody going in or out of the house for two days, they might start getting suspicious.”

For once, Alex was right. The cops were probably at his house this very moment hauling the fatass out in a body bag. They’ll probably slap a CONDEMNED poster up on the door on their way out and chain up the front door.

“We need to get back to my house and get that guitar!”

“But how? That place is probably swarming with cops. And there’s probably a WANTED poster with your picture up on every street corner by now.”

“A risk I’m definitely willing to take for that guitar.”

And they were off. Alex and Eric took every back alley shortcut they could find. Avoiding main streets and contact with anyone else but them was their highest priority at that point. Aside from Weaving through buggy backyards, outrunning savage dogs, and inching their way past windows, it was a pretty smooth trip. They had hopped Eric’s back fence and their jaws dropped. Every window was boarded up from the inside. To get into his bedroom, Eric had to smash through a layer of glass and particle board. Eric took a few steps back.

“Alex I’d stand back if I were you.”

“You’re kidding, right? If any cops are still in there, they’ll hear the alarm in a second and come running in there.”

“We’ll be two blocks away by then,” Eric said as he charged at his bedroom window.

Sure enough, a blaring alarm rang and could easily be heard from 5 houses away. For what seemed like 5 minutes, he stood in his room. The rest of the room looked like a war zone, scorch marks from where his amp caught fire, 2 dried pools of blood on his carpeting and bed, one from him, the other from his dad, and a blood-sprayed guitar laying next to a busted, bloody bottle of vodka.

And then off in the corner next to his TV, the SG, completely untouched. He grabbed it without hesitation and jumped through the window. Eric and Alex were halfway over the back fence when he heard a bellowing voice shout,

“Freeze! That’s evidence your running away with!”

In an ironic twist of fate, it was the same pig that had tried catching him on his way to Alex’s last night. Eric paid no mind to him as he jumped down from the fence. With no time to waste, the two boys took off down the street towards Alex’s house. They rounded the corner onto Alex’s block and saw Mr. Miller sitting on the porch enjoying a freshly unwrapped cigar.

“Where have you boys been?”

Eric always being on his toes, blurted out the first thing that came to mind.

“Band practice!”

“Really? I didn’t know you boys were in a band. I’ll have to hear you guys play sometime.”

“You bet.”
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HawkaLuigi
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Join date: Dec 2006
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#2
ZOMG! I'm on suspense with this story! It's excellent!


Get off my lawn.
sTx
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Join date: Apr 2006
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#3
Awesome, dude! Very cool!
You simply MUST check out my music on
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Especially for fans of Tool, APC, Avant-Garde, Ambient music, rock instrumentals, and fans of music in general. Will not disappoint.
shuriken
UG Senior Member
Join date: Feb 2007
818 IQ
#6
Quote by instigator12
well wheres part 3.


since i've gotten no feedback or interest from UG or too many members, i'm putting off part 3 until i feel it's worth posting
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minichibi
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Join date: Mar 2007
541 IQ
#7
Im interested....!! However, (i hope you want picky feedback, because thats what id like), I would put a little more description into your writing. Maybe a little description of alex and more of a description where they had the combo, etc...
PhrenchPhries
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Join date: Apr 2007
186 IQ
#8
Wow man, this is great. I thought it wasnt going to be that good, but I was pleasantly suprised. I cant wait to read another. We another UG writer on our hands.
jimbo09
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2007
32 IQ
#11
we want three! we want three! we want three! do it now!...please?
Originally Posted by jimbo09
"yeah man, i swallow and then **** out all my picks, it gives u really good tone, i swear"

Originally Posted by Union Jake

Long story short, 10 minutes later we were all sat there jerking off.
PunkRocker33133
Is now in a punk band
Join date: Sep 2007
681 IQ
#12
Wheres part 3 man, come on we love your writing!!!!
Quote by thefitz
Interesting. It turns out that there are people on the forum who play an upright bass. I'll make a note of that.

*makes note*

*puts note on wall*

*stares at note for a minute*

*sits back down and resumes doing what I was doing*
Varyag_Ace
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Join date: Oct 2007
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#13
please part three!!
Keep On Rockin´


Gear:
Ibanez GRG-270
Roland Cube30X
Zoom G2.1u
silhouettica
Plays Red Instruments.
Join date: Jan 2007
1,566 IQ
#14
Part 3 NAO
My Old Progressive Metal Band:
Acrasia
For fans of Between The Buried and Me, Dream Theater, Cynic.

My New Progressive Rock/Djent Band:
Wings Denied
For fans of Deftones, Tesseract, Periphery, Karnivool, Cynic.
qotsa1998
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Join date: Jul 2007
815 IQ
#15
awesome. much edgier and crazier than the other two stories that UG has put on the site, but still excellent i think. Altho it should be more descriptive about the characters definately. Id really like to see the story advance and end up on the front page like In the Van and Guitargasm have.
guitarist10
Registered User
Join date: May 2007
951 IQ
#16
THIS...IS...F*CKING...AWSOME...POST...PART...3...PLEASE!!!!!!!


I will die without part three!!
If ur ears aint ringin...ur doin it wrong

niguitars.com
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Join date: Mar 2006
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#17
"""since i've gotten no feedback or interest from UG or too many members, i'm putting off part 3 until i feel it's worth posting""""

thats a wanker reason
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...Damn you.
keltonhicks
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2007
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#18
I want to see more. NAO.
Quote:
Originally Posted by johnnynemo
"I can't believe you didn't dress up. You're the weirdest guy on this shift."
I said "I was gonna dress like your mom, but I didn't feel like growing a beard".
something_start
Registered User
Join date: Jun 2007
135 IQ
#20
bring it on! now! three! four! five! and when the story is done send it to a publishing facility and get it turned into a booK! haha
curently composes with Guitar Pro 5. amazing peace of software. i'd recomend it. and Samplitude recording studio.

myspace.com/somethingstarted
PunkRocker33133
Is now in a punk band
Join date: Sep 2007
681 IQ
#22
Is part three ever coming?
Quote by thefitz
Interesting. It turns out that there are people on the forum who play an upright bass. I'll make a note of that.

*makes note*

*puts note on wall*

*stares at note for a minute*

*sits back down and resumes doing what I was doing*
PiCSeL
pedobear
Join date: Aug 1999
281 IQ
#23
Submit all parts, then PM me. I'll approve it.
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PiCSeL
pedobear
Join date: Aug 1999
281 IQ
#24
Forgot to say: Each part is too small to approve. Glue all of them into one and that will be cool.
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