#1
hey guys i'm really new at this, this is my first finished song. I want to play this accoustic with a lot of smooth kinda minor 7th chords, and hitting and muting the strings on the 2nd and 4th beats. and critique would be greatly appreciated, i would offer to crit someone else's but i dont really know enough about songwriting to crit properly:P... Thanks in advance

sorry posted in the wrong forum before :P

Evergreen

Verse:
you change like the seasons
striving to never be the same
so many different reasons
no matter what, theres noone you can blame

woooo
branch out but dont forget you'll break
woooo
it could be more than you could take


Pre chorus:
can you stand up through the snow?
can you stand and not feel the wind blow?

Chorus:
if you could only change like the evergreen
stay warm not torn like you've always been
but, still change like an evergreen
stay on top of the world no matter what you've seen

Verse:

you change like my dreams
every second ones a nightmare
but some shine like neon beams
and if i never sleep those ones could go un-seen

woooo
branch out but dont forget you'll break
woooo
it could be a risk you have to take

Pre Chorus:
why dont you try to stand through the snow?
crash and burn at least now i know

Chorus:
you could never change like the evergreen
you'll stay warm but get torn like your meant to be
and never change like the evergreen
but you'll still stay on top no matter what you've seen

Outro:

Dont Change like the Evergreen
You cant change like an Evergreen
All i wanted was an Evergreen
But i could never have an Evergreen
lyrics - the gap between the solos
#2
first you said dont change like the evergreen. then u said YOU CAnt change like an evergreen coz i wanted the evergreen.


wats an evergreen??
#3
first you said dont change like the evergreen. then u said YOU CAnt change like an evergreen coz i wanted the evergreen.


wats an evergreen??