#1
This is a pretty short song lyric wise. But that's how i thought of it, hence the [bridge/solo] part lol.

anyways, here it is:

[Main Riff]

The queens given head rush
No need for a trillion lives supplied
Not a certainty thought of
Just a black hole of silly believing
Come in good, oh the wind of change
Nothing to secure, the feeling

Chorus
And I don’t know what’s what
But I do feel redemption
Just a million times further
We can make the good action
Just to fight for the good
And to know of our rights
But the Mr men come
And it’s gone out of sight
With nothing to spare…
Nothing to bloody spare…
With nothing to spare…
Meaningless

Make the party queasy
Till the hawks and the sparrows survive
Descend from this car crash
Not a person unheard of or spoken in turn
Get dolled up, flock to the fields
Take a deep breath, you need it

[Chorus]

[Bridge/solo]

[Chorus]

Constuctive critisism always appreciated
#4
Hey, nice.
I could sense the Thom influence from the repetition and the single word lines, even before I read you Bends quote.

One thing I like to do that I got from him: Write lyrics intended for a verrryy long metre (so each line lasts ages and rhyme is not nescesary) then shuffle them about at random, with the most meaningful ones last. Thats how he writes his dada-ist poetry that you see on albums like Kid A.
#5
Quote by thellamaking


Chorus
And I don’t know what’s what
But I do feel redemption
Just a million times further
We can make the good action
Just to fight for the good
And to know of our rights
But the Mr men come
And it’s gone out of sight
With nothing to spare…
Nothing to bloody spare…
With nothing to spare…
Meaningless



Get off this damn forum and play your damn guitar.