#1
Girl screwed me over recently. What else is knew? Just something simple. c4c ofcourse.


Give It A Break

She wants to leave
She says I'm holding her back
I said girl just relax
Give it a break
Give it a break
And I could see
That she wasn't meant for this
What we had was meaningless
I think I should give it a break
Give it a break

For now
I'll see through this
I always do
I'll just move on
And forget about you

There she goes
walking out of my life
I lost track of what was right
I gotta give it a break
Give it a break
Here's what I said
But I never really meant
As I look back on my regrets
I have to give it a break
Give it a break

For now
I'll see through this
I always do
I'll just move on
And forget about you

I let her go
Now I go through every day
Thinking about my mistakes
Give it a break
Give it a break
#2
She wants to leave
She says I'm holding her back
I said girl just relax
Give it a break
Give it a break
And I could see
That she wasn't meant for this
What we had was meaningless
I think I should give it a break
Give it a break

mm right off the bat i think that repetition is a hard thing to use.i think that you could jsut use one give it a break not two in a row when you do it. and try to get most of your lines within 1-3 syllybles of each other. it should help make is sound smoother. sounds pretty good other then that

For now
I'll see through this
I always do
I'll just move on
And forget about you

wow this is a really good stanza sounds ok.. flow's pretty good not much ryming going on but thats ok and wouldnet it be i'll see this through? the way you use it sounds a bit funny

There she goes
walking out of my life
I lost track of what was right
I gotta give it a break
Give it a break
Here's what I said
But I never really meant
As I look back on my regrets
I have to give it a break
Give it a break

sounds ok.. the here's what i said doesnt fit in the stanza because you never said what you said so it's like a hanger......... it's like here's a mountain......it's just kind of sitting there.. the first three lines flow very well together. the three before the last sound ok i think you could also do without the last line

For now
I'll see through this
I always do
I'll just move on
And forget about you

repeat

I let her go
Now I go through every day
Thinking about my mistakes
Give it a break
Give it a break
ok this was very good the repetition worked out this time. i like the 2 b4 the give it a break. try to find diffrent word instead of go. for one of htem and leave the other as go.

over all this will need some work. flow would really help this run smoothly. soryr if my remarks are a bit harsh and random. i read through a few times look at different places in the stanza and hop around i hope you didnt find it difficult to understand. well good luck
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