#1
Girl I really fancy called Jess, daren't tell her but she's probarbly worked it out, because so many other people have. Anyway here's my song to her. Crit 4 Crit applies, please give a out of 10 rating.

Crit 4 Crit applies.
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Jess Is Amazing.zip
Last edited by bikersbasin at Nov 4, 2007,
#2
The first thing that caught my attention was the change in progression after the first set of arpeggios. It gave more "something" to the song.

The solo - I don't get it ... You basically play the same thing in the second half of the bars, but instead of D:-2-, you play A:-7- ... the same note. If you want to mix it up, then mix it up!

And .. was there any reason guitar 1 is set to mute? Just curious on that. ..And please tell me you have, or are working on lyrics to this. It's got the perfect structure for it.

I wish you the best of luck, sir.
#3
Simple and sweet.

It goes really quiet though! If that's what you were after though, that's cool.

It could be a bit more 'vibrant', you know, lol like, just adding something different to the next verse. Not to make it repetitive. It's looking real nice though.
#4
Quote by piquet
The first thing that caught my attention was the change in progression after the first set of arpeggios. It gave more "something" to the song.

The solo - I don't get it ... You basically play the same thing in the second half of the bars, but instead of D:-2-, you play A:-7- ... the same note. If you want to mix it up, then mix it up!

And .. was there any reason guitar 1 is set to mute? Just curious on that. ..And please tell me you have, or are working on lyrics to this. It's got the perfect structure for it.

I wish you the best of luck, sir.


yeah the guitars not meant to be on mute :P but yeah, its more of an interlude than a solo, and im not really good at writing lyrics but i'll give it a whirl, thanks for the crit
#5
Quote by ctb
Simple and sweet.

It goes really quiet though! If that's what you were after though, that's cool.

It could be a bit more 'vibrant', you know, lol like, just adding something different to the next verse. Not to make it repetitive. It's looking real nice though.


agreed

sorry i couldnt be more detailed but he took the words right out of my...fingers...

c4c? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=700568
#7
Not my type of music really, but its well made and its quite soothing actually. Nice job. I don't think the solo interlude has to be any more complex, it would perhaps ruin the mood of the song (or perhaps not, do as you want).
8.5/10