#1
youre outgoing and talkative
i'm quiet and keep things to myself
one day you and me should stay
in this we made of memories where we
could talk all night about every little thing
i'd pay to hear your voice i'd die to hear you sing
about then times when you were scared and alone
your friends left you behind and i stayed on my phone

you make me
tounge tied and illeterate
i wish i could say
all the right words each and every day

your smile tore me up
as your eyes pierced my soul
one glance sent chills down my spine
i swear i felt my heart explode
with the thought i had of being with you
for only one night unless you asked for two

you make me
tounge tied and illeterate
i wish i could say
all the right words each and every day

it doesnt have to end this way
we could try once more
it doesnt have to end this way
we could try once more

you make me
tounge tied and illeterate
i wish i could say
all the right words each and every day

you make me
tounge tied and illeterate
i wish i could say
all the right words each and every day


just looking for any kind of contructive criticism
Last edited by Mr.Brown$t0ne at Nov 6, 2007,
#2
tongue is spelled tongue, not tounge
and i think it's good, but it sounds way too pop for my being, is like the same old hollywood movie.