#1
Hey this is my first song and i know i have a long way to go but just wanted to see if i could get some feedback.

So many nights spent under starry skies
You might have thought time had finally passed us by
But fate's cruel grasp was soon to have its way
On that sorry morning of that long november day

Chorus:
And I still see the sun that day
I still see the sun i never thought would fade
And i still wonder why it all happened so fast
I still wonder why the past is the past

Amber skies violently fading to black
It seemed true love was finally under attack
Shadows overwhelmed and time itself stood still
Nature paused, to admire all at its will

Chorus

Grey clouds touched down claiming all that was good
Oceans vanished and finally i understood
I called your name praying for you to come
but it seems with you gone my soul finally gave up
#2
You're going to get told to read the rules about titles and repost it, just to warn you. I'd delete this thread.
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#3
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You're going to get told to read the rules about titles and repost it, just to warn you. I'd delete this thread.

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what he said.

Welcome around, you're definitely at the right place to get feedback. However, please take the time to read the rules : your thread is wrongly titled. Enjoy your time around

-Mat