#1
this is about peer pressure and how it comes from everywhere. i do realize i swear alot its because it adds emotion i think


this is our time
here and now

HERE AND NOW!

pressure drives us
its our internal instinct
pushing and pushing us further
until we fall over the edge

nobody drives you more
than the ones who love you the most!

chorus:
push it down and flush it out, PRESSURE!
swallow it and force it down, PRIDE!

now is your time
They think they ****ing deserve you
Drive yourself to prove them wrong
drive yourself over the edge

nothing drives you more,
than the hate that consumes you!

chorus 2:
push it down and flush it out, PRESSURE!
swallow it and force it down, PRIDE!
Crumple it up and throw it away, LUST!
you need to accept the fact that you, TRIED!

what more is there to prove
that hasn't already been proven
life is what you ****ing make of it!
don't you count on it.

I won't let life be foretold as bull ****
I'll make life be my own
i'll make it what i make it
AND NOT SOME BULL **** EXCUSE!

You can't tell me I'm wrong (X3)
When I say:

nobody drives you more
than the ones who love you the most!
nothing drives you more,
than the hate that consumes you!

Chorus 2

THAT YOU TRIED! (X4)
#3
I dont know if I liked this, tbo. I though the intro-bit before the first verse was unnesesary, as it didnt add to the peice at all. Does the capitalization denote, *wince*, screaming, by any chance? The first verse I though was good, the first line of it would open a song nicely.
I think you need to work on the metre, it feels disjointed, and it doesnt flow so much. Just re-evaluate your lines, think: how could this work better? Change things around.
I didnt like the chorus at all. Mainly because it sounds like your taking a ****. "Push it down and flush it out"? Sorry but I had to laugh, not because its bad, just 'cos of what it sounded like.
The end of chorus two was pretty good, and the bridge before the last satnza. I think you need to cut it down a tad 'cos it feels overlong and stuff is repeated too much. Also I dont think swearing help a peice in any way, just de-sensetises you audience to what you're really saying.
Otherwise its pretty good. Has the makings of a good song, imo.
Peace.
Dave.