#1
I know this isn't good I just wrote some **** down I was feeling and yeah. Kinda like that. Didn't even read through it again, so I am sure it does not all fit together but oh well.

The world seemed to end
The second the trees started to moan
a painful cry
a cry for help
a cry to get
a better world
a better humanity and cleaner rationality


air that glided through the sky
kinda like a knife in my heart
all i can say
is that i died
that i died
long ago

she stabbed me once
oh make that twice
I'd do it all again
because of the hair
the eyes
the smile
the kiss

I could only wish
That I were able to cut you down
like you did to me all those times
like you didn't realize
my pain
my cry


air that glided through the sky
kinda like a knife in my heart
all i can say
is that i died
that i died
long ago


I remember the day I died
I woke up to her voice
It sounded close
but yet so far
I went to her house
to find her with another guy
I slammed the door shut
turned off the lights
and ended my life
in one blink of an eye


air that glided through the sky
kinda like a knife in my heart
all i can say
is that i died
that i died
long ago
#3
"a painful cry
a cry for help
a cry to get
a better world" i feel that you used cry too much maybe put it together like"A painful cry, a cry for help to get a better world" and so on but thats just my opinion.
try not to use so much repetition but for just thinking it and writting down is good. not a bad thing to just write down thoughts and sometime put them together to make something better.
#4
Quote by fender_696
eeeeeeeeeeeeeemmmmmmmoooooooooooooo

of course there is emotion in the song, but I am far from someone you would classify as "emo".