#1
As we get older everything gets colder
and we think we know it all
but thinks change and what I knew
days ago is not the same
Is this the way its suppost to go?
or am I going insane? Should I
say truth or lies? If only I could
find a way (to gently say your name)

In the hottest nights
in the coldest days
in the pitch black
and in the burning flames
I would care for you everyday
I would fight for you everyone
just to find a way (to gently say your name)

Now I think of you and I try not to say
cause you seem to think
that I hate
but how could I hate
that divine place!
but yes I hate how
I can't find a way (to gently say your name)

In the hottest nights
in the coldest days
in the pitch black
and in the burning flames
I would care for you everyday
I would fight for you everyone
just to find a way (to gently say your name)

Someday I hope we'll say
sorry and we'll make up
but as this war drags on and on
it looks bleaker
and one day I hope I'll find a way (to gently say your name)


In the hottest nights
in the coldest days
in the pitch black
and in the burning flames
I would care for you everyday
I would fight for you everyone
just to find a way (to gently say your name)


In the hottest nights
in the coldest days
in the pitch black
and in the burning flames
I would care for you everyday
I would fight for you everyone
just to find a way (to gently say your name)

Ohhhh my wish is simply to find a way
(to gently say your name)

How is it?
#2
hi be sure to read all the rules and stickies. This section of the forum is for songwriting technique discussion. Posting pieces looking for critiques belongs in the main songwriting section. Also, titles of threads in that forum can only contain the song title and the type of piece it is and if it has none, untitled will do.

thanks and good luck

~jimi
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Anatomy Anatomy
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Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me