#1
my new song i just finished, enjoy, and crit if you want to

lift your head up to the sky
watch the flowers as they rise
the rain will never wash away
the dirt that holds us high

so whn the clouds rip open from up high
dump their water on an unsuspecting lie
we will stand tall watch the trains go by
'till the day we catch a ride

we live for, the day the sun will break through the clouds
we live for, the day that we will realize who we are
the clocks are counting down the hours
the daylight is fading fast
the seasons change to winter
but always to spring at last

and we say, and we say

snow may fall upon your head
you've got to shake it off, keep you eyes ahead
you've got to see what's left of your lonely tread
don't get lost, in the storm

thunder and lightning overhead
while we're safe and sound deep in our beds
waiting for the sun to shine
on another perfect opportunity

we live for, the day the sun will break through the clouds
we live for, the day that we will realize who we are
the clocks are counting down the hours
the daylight is fading fast
the seasons change to winter
but always to spring at last

and we say, and we say
#2
i like this but i'm wondering


are you going to be singing this or screaming it


i think this would be very difficult to scream
#3
Quote by blakejones917
i like this but i'm wondering


are you going to be singing this or screaming it


i think this would be very difficult to scream

lol, im definitely singing it, its an acoustic song.
#4
I think it sounds great! Is it a Chord song? Or is it more spread out? If it is a chord song, what chords do you use? Majors or Minors? Anyways, I think it's a great song, man. Hope you can sing good!
#5
very nice.
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You're just another brick in the wall
#7
Hey! Thats against the rules you know.

I'm not mean enough to report you...Just dont do it again.

Not bad song tho. I havent got time for a thorough crit' bit I will say this: "and we say, and we say" THE END? What do you say? Close it better I think...
Feel free to offer opinions on any of mine, though I obviosly dont expect a proper crit in return for this pathetic attempt.