#1
Wrote this about 2 years ago or so, no real name for it. Just what I put on there, tell me what you think. I posted this at a (+44) fan site a while back to. Got maybe 2 replies, just seeing what I get from here now that it actually a completed song.

Unfold the note
Read me the writing
Tell me everything you see

Do you see my heart you hold
The fearless mighty
Pen dragged across the page

It's been so many years
I've spent so many nights
I wondered why you felt so warm

Now tonight I hold you close
Now tonight I touch your hair
You'll never come to harm

So breathe easy
Breathe lightly
The air is thick with lightning
Gray skies aren't that frightening
So be careful
Be honest
These words aren't the strongest
So many answers were promised


Now close your eyes
And feel through the shadow
Tell me everything you feel

Do you feel an old notebook
You dropped in highschool
That was left open for me to see

I only saw 3 words
I only read one line
And it wasn't about me

I just want to know one thing
That you want me and nothing
Else to be yours, can't you see?

So breathe easy
Breathe lightly
The air is thick with lightning
Gray skies aren't that frightening
So be careful
Be honest
These words aren't the strongest
So many answers were promised

Now here we stand
On the sidewalk we drew on when we were kids
Now here we go
Can you help me find out just what love is
How can I know?
This storm is building and you're down on me
Just so you know
I'll always be here for you in purgatory

unfold the note
read the writing
tell me everything you see

do you see the song I wrote
that ended in 'I love you'
And you meant everything to me


So breathe easy
Breathe lightly
The air is thick with lightning
Gray skies aren't that frightening
So be careful
Be honest
These words aren't the strongest
So many answers were promised
Last edited by RTG182 at Nov 9, 2007,
#2
Pretty good stuff, man. I really like how it's put together, and you actually have a point to the song. It's most likely better then what I could do, no doubt! Keep them coming!
#3
Pretty good stuff, man. I really like how it's put together, and you actually have a point to the song. It's most likely better then what I could do, no doubt! Keep them coming! EDIT: oops! Sorry for the accidental double post(It told me to wait 30 seconds!) Really sorry about this!
Last edited by black amendment at Nov 9, 2007,
#6
Very excellent from my point of view. Nothing seems to be wrong with it. I can put it to the music of something like Queens of the Stone Age.
#7
Quote by NFXtreme
Very excellent from my point of view. Nothing seems to be wrong with it. I can put it to the music of something like Queens of the Stone Age.

Thanks bro
#8
well u may have 3 words for me but i have one for you SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET dude. i like the chorus its awesome i wish i had thought of that its genious. post some more maybe?
#9
Quote by boston42002
well u may have 3 words for me but i have one for you SWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET dude. i like the chorus its awesome i wish i had thought of that its genious. post some more maybe?

haha thanks yeah I will post up some more later or something.
#11
I like it, the low point would be that whole puragatory bit, but rather than that schweet.
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#12
Quote by Flyingwhitey182
I like it, the low point would be that whole puragatory bit, but rather than that schweet.

Thank you..