#1
IDK if I posted this on here before or not, but I did a search and nothing came up, but here it is.

War Of The World, Battle Of My Life

Everything that I once knew
I got to throw away just to get through
This war for mankind, the battle of my life
All I have is this gun and a puny little knife

It's the battle of the world, they say soon it's going to end
They say fight for your country, but it's our lives we got to defend
Everything we've wanted is now gone
Everyone is losing faith but we need to stay strong

People are dying left and right
thousands are dead every night
I'm really lucky to be alive
While every is starting to run and hide

Alot of people who are dying
Most have families that are now crying
Most of the soldiers just started their life
but now it is all ending cause of this fight

Everything that I once knew
I got to throw away just to get through
This war for mankind, the battle of my life
All I have is this gun and a puny little knife

It's the battle of the world, they say soon it's going to end
They say fight for your country, but it's our lives we got to defend
Everything we've wanted is now gone
Everyone is losing faith but we need to stay strong

Everyone wants this war to end
but the men in charge won't until a country wins
but this war has been lasting way to long
and most the soldiers are fighting without knowing whats wrong

The war has lasted over 10 years
and yet a winner is still not clear
soldiers still getting killed, and familes feeling the pain
now there is nothing left for anyone to gain

solo or a break thing is going to go here

It was on the final day
A treaty was signed, nothing much to say
but some of the battles continued and still were fought
and it was on this last and final day I got shot

Everything that I once knew
I got to throw away just to get through
This war for mankind, the battle of my life
All I have is this gun and a puny little knife

It's the battle of the world, they say soon it's going to end
They say fight for your country, but it's our lives we got to defend
Everything we've wanted is now gone
Everyone is losing faith but we need to stay strong
#2
The chorus seems to come up far too regularly. Try break it up a bit more, specify a bridge and the verse and maybe alter the chorus last time round?

Other than that, good, simple and a valid message your sending through the lyrics.


I'd appreciate it if you check out my thread 'Time Can Wait'. It's pretty short and I'm a noob at writing songs, but meh.
#3
Quote by Jmac5
The chorus seems to come up far too regularly. Try break it up a bit more, specify a bridge and the verse and maybe alter the chorus last time round?

Other than that, good, simple and a valid message your sending through the lyrics.


I'd appreciate it if you check out my thread 'Time Can Wait'. It's pretty short and I'm a noob at writing songs, but meh.


yea, I was thinking of changing the last chorus, so thanks for the advice, and I'll check yours out.