#1
"No Regrets, No Remorse"
Verses:
How can you live each day, with a smile on your face,
knowing you hurt me, is this not a never ending chase?

I tried, and I failed, but eventually I won,
then I lost, and was bailed, from this bombing run.

When really all you need is a pat on the back,
Now to this day, your heart is still cold and as black.

You act like you don't care,
But you know that your glare,
is as fake as your love for me.

I can't sleep at night, thinking of you,
thinking of me.

I just wish he could be,
Happy...Instead we're just an endless catosprophe.

Being hurt, being dumped, being knocked to the ground.
Being kicked, when I'm down, being pushed around.

Don't end this right now,
because I won't give up.

I fought for three years,
And I've only begun.

I can't stop thinking about your bright blue eyes,
Your long brown hair,
Your gorgeus stare,
But then again, your my nightmare.

When you scream at me,
I listen more,
To see what I can fix,
whatevers broken.

Bridge:
When you run away from me,
I chase you.

When you put your face near mine,
I kiss it.

When you punch at me, and kick me,
I hold you tight.

When you pull away from me,
I grasp your waist.

When your at your worst,
I tell you you're beautiful.

When your scared,
I tell you everyting will be ok.

Does that not show you I care??
Last edited by AcousticLegacy at Nov 9, 2007,
#2
this is a nice song, it just seems like you should look at the situation with a more open emotions. Don't get so concentrated on being down, or confused. Look deep inside yourself, and use what you feel to make this song a true symbol for you emotions. You have the right idea, you just need that extra bit of "you" to make it complete. nice work! -TD
#3
Quote by istayaway7
this is a nice song, it just seems like you should look at the situation with a more open emotions. Don't get so concentrated on being down, or confused. Look deep inside yourself, and use what you feel to make this song a true symbol for you emotions. You have the right idea, you just need that extra bit of "you" to make it complete. nice work! -TD


Wow thanks. Thats great

Tonight, I'm going to do what you said, and we'll see how it turns out.

Thank you so much

If you havent already, look at "Open Eyes" a song I wrote..
#5
Pretty good, but change the title. It's too close to a line from "No Remorse". It goes, 'No remorse, no regret, doesn't matter what it meant."
#7
I thought it was decent - It seemed a bit hackneyed and unoriginal. There were a few well written lines that I liked such as 'you're my nightmare' and the happy/catastrophe rhyme.

keep going, you'll develop your own style soon enough and that might take you away from the more overused imagery and ideas.