#5
I think this would make a very cool little transitional piece or an instrumental ending to an album, but that's it. As an individual song it really doesn't jump out at you, it's pretty dull and repetitive but it can quite easily function as an outro to an album if you stick a nice long fadeout at the end, which you have. I think the rather drole temp is part of it, speed it up a little and certainly work on your drums. They need to be more exciting, or even in double time. That would liven the song up a lot.

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#6
awesome song, the lead work with the harmonies and all that is great. I really enjoyed the song, my only crit would be the bass line, you should add more variations to it, at least in the acoustic guitar parts.

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#7
Very good Indeed. I enjoyed that a lot. Guitar sounds very melodic and keyboard is fantastic. I really liked the outro riff thats very unique and amazing Only bad thing what comes to my mind is drums, try to improve them. Crit mine? Apprehension Of Silence
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#8
I liked it. It was pretty catchy.

It got to be a bit repetitive, though. Some guitar or drum fills would've been nice. Also, a solo would've really sweetened the deal during the end part.
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#9
Dude, I like this song. I agree with duncang in that it would be a great conclusion to an album or whatever and that the drums need to be more lively. Double time would work, and try to add some toms and whatnot in there, otherwise, it's pretty killer.
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