#1
Alright, I know they're not very good, but here:

You Used to Be


(Verse)
Whenever I see you you're actin' different but I don't know why,
I ask for a smile but you don't even try,
'Cause lately you've been so shy,
So I ask you why?

All I've been wanting is an answer,
But lately, I just haven't gotten the chance,
To ask, what is up with you?
Is there something I can do?

(Chorus)
So please just tell me what's the matter, this, time,
I'm sure any reply would, be, just, fine,
'Cause you used to be, so happy, and, fun,
I just don't know what's happened to everyone.

(Verse)
Everybody can see what's happening,
But you act as if no one can notice a thing,
'Cause lately, you just haven't been the same,
C'mon, give it up I don't wanna play any more games.

(Double Chorus)
So please just tell me what's, the matter, this, time,
I'm sure any reply would, be, just, fine,
'Cause you used to be, so happy, and, fun,
I just don't know what's happened to everyone.
So please just tell me what's, the matter, this, time,
I'm sure any reply would, be, just, fine,
'Cause you used to be, so happy, and, fun,
I just don't know what's happened to everyone.
Last edited by k00kie M0nster at Nov 15, 2007,
#3
nightraven, I see what you're saying about the last line in the first stanza, but it's part of the structure. If I recorded it with the chords, it would sound fine except for the decaying rhyme. Also, for the everybody part where you said to use everyone instead, that's actually what I say when I normally sing the song. The confusing comas are part of the pauses I use when I sing the song, so again if I recorded it you'd see. Many thanks for the crit
#5
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Sadly, C4C cannot be in your thread title.


Ok Thanks

Edit: Why won't it work???
Last edited by k00kie M0nster at Nov 15, 2007,
#6
You can't edit the title. Just repost with a correct one . At least now you know! Please take the time to read the other rules if you haven't yet, too.

Thank you!