#1
I dunno if I like it, I just wrote it up in a few minutes just a basic idea and layout. Oh well tell me what you think.

It's broken how can I fix it?
((I always tried))
You never liked it, you kinda played me
((I always tried))
She set her sail and I waited
(I always tried)

I was clear object
she always played me
but somehow I still fell for it
Baby, I dunno why I couldn't see it
But I can see the sun coming down

Your little parade is ending
(I always tried)
You never were, sincere
(I always tried)
me myself and I gave it all
(I always tried)
But you, and you alone
turned it down like a kid would take a lollipop

I was clear object
she always played me
but somehow I still fell for it
Baby, I dunno why I couldn't see it
But I can see the sun coming down

You always got the best of me
But hey, so would anyone in my position
You and your blue eye
radiant blond hair tonight
I am just going down
oh oh oh oh
Last edited by RTG182 at Nov 13, 2007,
#2
its good, creative, but i thought the line "turned it down like a queen would homecoming crown" should kinda be replaced, just an opinion and good job