#1
Something i just wrote, aint necessarily finished, i think it might need something else maybe a bridge bit or a longer different chorus at the end. Just looking for peoples opinions and if they have any ideas that might help, the music for it has a radiohead vibe if that helps you picture it in ya head in anyway.


Rainclouds
kids with money to burn are spending it
faster than they earn
so they watch their dreams ignite
smoke coming out of illegal pipes
and its all over the city
it blocks out the sun
like a great rain cloud come undone

choose your words carefully
they'll be around much longer than you and me
watch out for the rainclouds they dont let go
they dont hear you when you say no
theyre all over the city
they block out the sun
caught in a web and youre not the only one

im on the edge i cant let go
im on the edge think you should know

i need your help
give me your assistance
give me your hand
lets start the resistance

ive heard theyre contagious
heard they spreads like a virus
make you ask questions of yourself
not good for your head or for your health
dont need your pitty
cos im not the only one
to fall from the raincloud come undone

im on the edge i cant let go
im on the edge think you should know

i need your help
give me your assistance
give me your hand
lets start the resistance

c4c
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#2
i really liked this one, i have my guitar on my hand, and i started giving it some chords, very fast improvisation and i really enjoyed it cause it's very easy to sing and play and it sounds good..

"im on the edge i cant let go
im on the edge think you should know

i need your help
give me your assistance
give me your hand
lets start the resistance"

liked that one a lot...

i played it like
Bm ................. G
im on the edge i cant let go
Bm ..................... G
im on the edge think you should know
D
i need your help
A
give me your assistance
G
give me your hand
D
lets start the resistance


it was fun to play