#1
I had so many plans and dreams when I was young
I never thoutght I'd be
The man that I've become
But now I'm here with all my missed oppurtunities
And I'll my broken dreams

Life goes on
You gotta be strong
You gotta make the best out of what you got
There ain't no point
In layin' around
You gotta give life your best shot

I feel like I wasted my life away
I know it's too late
The past can't be changed
Sometimes your best laid plans
Can cave in on you

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#2
nah, its not for a loser. personaly i dont like it. take out the "life goes on" verse and put something harder. things that sound like if a loser would say it
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#3
I had so many plans and dreams when I was young
I never thoutght I'd be
The man that I've become
But now I'm here with all my missed oppurtunities
And I'll my broken dreams

okay i really like the opening here its an attention grabber to me anyways
and i like the wierd ryhme thing you got goin on with young-become


Life goes on
You gotta be strong
You gotta make the best out of what you got
There ain't no point
In layin' around
You gotta give life your best shot

this to me doesnt exactly flow nicely with the start i would change this and get a better flow goin on here

I feel like I wasted my life away
I know it's too late
The past can't be changed
Sometimes your best laid plans
Can cave in on you

and this last part just.... i just dont like it i hope you dont take that as an insult because its not its just you had such a STRONG start and then it fell apart right before my eyes
i liked the start but the other stuff could use some improving you have some potential with this piece and just because i didnt like the whole doesnt mean anything opinions are a dime a dozen i hope that you write some new stuff and when you do send me a link and i'll crit that too also if you have old stuff that you would like crited by all means send a link
and thanks for critin my piece hope i could be of some help
#6
great intro, i think a lot of people can relate to the song too. It feels like the 2 other verses don't flow as well though.
If you have some free time, i'd appreciate it if you'd give my song a look:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=707414
#7
This is not entirely a loser anthem . Personally I don't like it . Correct the typos in there .
Your ending is weak .Think from a loser point of view and then write it again
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#8
I was dissapointed.
I thought it would be fynnier og catchier.. If that's a word..
But to call it the loser anthem is such s shame. It doesn't sound like anything a loser would write, more something that an old emo would write, and it is in no way at all an anthem..
i honestly didn't like it much
#10
I had so many plans and dreams when I was young
I never thoutght I'd be
The man that I've become
But now I'm here with all my missed oppurtunities
And I'll my broken dreams

good opening, nice flow and all that stuff, nothing else to really say here,

Life goes on
You gotta be strong
You gotta make the best out of what you got
There ain't no point
In layin' around
You gotta give life your best shot

i dont really like this verse at all, seems so over used, but i mean its not horrible just not very good thats all,

I feel like I wasted my life away
I know it's too late
The past can't be changed
Sometimes your best laid plans
Can cave in on you

this is very bad, very bad flow, and it just sounded sound good, man take out the last 2 verse and keep the first and start over or try to build more, because this song is very short to man, but anyways awesome first verse, crit my song as the clock hits seven