#1
firstable, i'm sry for being so hasty with my first post. i read the rules now.
(but i'm not sure if my first post already counted as "1 post per day".)
anyway, the lyrics:

i still remember these days
and i remember these nights
we buried this haze
it was a place for us to hide
your broken hand then obtained
the hidden piece that was locked
in the depths of my brain
in the chains of self-doubt

this rage explosion was then created
and we were thrown into
it's corrosion got accelerated
ate us all the way through
in this *** hurricane
my thought was running circles
it's hard for me to explain
there seemed to be no purpose
#2
I like how you sneak in rhyme where it's not overpowering, but effective. You might want to consider lengthening it.