#1
If I was nine would you mind?
If my heart would be worth a dime would you whine?
Now why should I spill a tear for thy?

Do you like the taste of a lie?
Then I'm not going to waste the truth
That bitter-sweet symphony, that some might call their live.
Others just call it their wife.


This is untitled for now, i know it's really short it's something i just came up with i'll finish it tomorrow it's kinda late here.


PS: can you find out about what it is?
Looking for a new sig!
#2
one day has passed since i wrote this, now i'm doubting whether it's decent or not.
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#3
If I was nine would you mind?
If my heart would be worth a dime would you whine?
Now why should I spill a tear for thy?

its alright nothing amazing, and i gotta add i dont know much about poetry so i dunno how much i can help, but overall this seems pretty solid

Do you like the taste of a lie?
Then I'm not going to waste the truth
That bitter-sweet symphony, that some might call their live.
Others just call it their wife.

not to bad man, but not amazing either, um kinda short so there is not alot to say, accept its was decent, sorry for the bad crit, care to look at mine, as the clock hits seven