#1
Song i wrote today about an ex-girlfriend

Oh Mrs Strange
Are you gonna change your ways ?
I always wonder if you'll find a guy
Who's content with your loving style
And who will be there every second of the day
Instead of lose his mind like all the others
And turn you away

You have to learn to understand
That everyone needs time to themselves
Noone can satisfy your needs

Oh Mr Strange
Are you gonna leave her soon ?
It's been so long and i know you're getting tired
I know when i was in your shoes i almost went insane
That strange girl could've been the death of me
So please just tell her this

Mrs Strange , to make things work
Find your love , give him some space
Mrs Strange , just make a change
-Green Fig-
#2
Oh Mrs Strange
Are you gonna change your ways ?
I always wonder if you'll find a guy
Who's content with your loving style
And who will be there every second of the day
Instead of lose his mind like all the others
And turn you away
Those first lines are okay... but to me they're not too special...I dunno, sth's mising

You have to learn to understand
That everyone needs time to themselves
Noone can satisfy your needs
It's getting better here

Oh Mr Strange <- i like that
Are you gonna leave her soon ?
It's been so long and i know you're getting tired
I know when i was in your shoes i almost went insane
That strange girl could've been the death of me
So please just tell her this
i don't like the last line of this... and is supposed to rhyme?

Mrs Strange , to make things work
Find your love , give him some space
Mrs Strange , just make a change
the end is okay...

I don't like this one all that much... There's nothing wrong with the subject, might be just me but it's just all so normal... I think it doesn't tell us anything we don't already know... But it's not that it's really bad or anything, it's okay, just not my kind of thing.

C4C?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=712208
thx
#3
Sad to say, you don't have the spark needed for good songs. It sucks when that happens, I know. It lacks that certain 'zing'. I'm sorry but I can't help further than that.