#1
It's the first time I am trying to do this . I am not a good artist . Anyway tell me what do u think. Crit 4 Crit as usual



[B][U]Grand Finale[/U][/B]


  [B]World's View[/B]

         ______
       /   |  \
   ___/___ |___\___                   {}
  |                |                  /|\
  |____  _____  ___|                  / \   
        0     0   

[B]  Victim's View[/B]

            When a speeding 

                      Car
                      _____
                    /      \
                  \/ ______\/
                   |______ |
                   O__ x__O
                   u      u
                          
                     Confronts      
                           
                         {} 
                         /|\
                         / \  
                           
                         YOU
                           

             You don't care about the verdict,
                          based on  moral and legal technicality.

                      --- \ / ---
                       ---\|/---
                       -- {}--

                       {}              {}   
                       /|\             /|\       
                       / \             / \  

               Ironically, both worlds do...

                                            {}
                                            /|\
                                            / \        At least they pretend to.
                  ________
                    /      \
                  \/ ______\/
                   |______ |
                   O__ x__O
                   u      u
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Last edited by abhishek21 at Nov 16, 2007,
#2
I don't understand the need for a picture...And you might need more than 4 or 5 lines in a song. Either way, I think they're a good start to a song.
#3
Quote by k00kie M0nster
I don't understand the need for a picture...And you might need more than 4 or 5 lines in a song. Either way, I think they're a good start to a song.


It's not a song.

Any more??
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Last edited by abhishek21 at Nov 17, 2007,
#4
Why cant most people on this forum diffrentiate between songs and poems/prose?

"Dude, lol, sweetzorz! Don'ts knows how it wuld work as a song, but cooool."


Anyway....it's cute. I'm not a big fan of this recent trend of writing pieces through HTML text images and whatnot. It's overly pretentious.
Poor advice.
#5
I don't really like the images with these kind of things either, but the text is good in my opinion...
#6
People think that only songs are posted in S+l and since this forum is on a guitar site . they think every thing posted here is bound to fit with music

I know this kinda **** is pretentious . It's like u have a half cooked idea , u just throw some stupid image in it and let people figure out what exactly does it mean.

I just wanted to try out this.Thnx for ur time

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#7
I liked it. you could fix up your second car a bit but no big deal. I like how the second car says You if you look down the sides of it. It was nice but nothing groundbreaking in my opinion.
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Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
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