#1
This is kind of an old one, and I kinda gave up on it before... but it feels like it has some potential at least... so I thought some crit could help me out here

Society of scum:

you tell me to smile at life
like I really mean it
but I can't see one ****ing thing
of what you say, or feel it

now what would you have me do
to get me up my feet
what story would you make up
to hide their hate and greed

I have my own eyes,
and they see a world of hatred
and I have got my lungs
they breath air that creates death
and what do I feel
in this world that's turning numb
to all it's been put trough
by our society of scum

so what would you suggest now
to make us feel alive
something to get us going
we need a certain drive

now what would be the answer
to all of nature's cries
why shouldn't we be worried
resume our daily lives

we have got our own ears
and we can hear the shrieks
and we have got empathy
know sometimes silence speaks
and what do we feel
in this world that has turned numb
to all it's been put through
by our society of scum

so what would you suggest now
to make it feel alive
something to get it going
it needs a certain drive

now what would be the answer
to all of nature's cries
why shouldn't we be worried
believe these shallow lies
#2
I actually really like this. The rhyme is great and I can really feel the rhythm. It sounds kind of like a rebellious punk song. 7/10