#1
Well, I've been complimented alot for this poem/song or whatever it is, but only by people who doesn't speak english on a dayli basis, so I figured I'd try and post it in here.. Maybe some of you can tell if it's really as good as I've been told it is..

Death Penalty

This my friend
It’s called the end

Who made this up
Who decided we have lived enough
Maybe it’s a lie
We will never die
It is just fantasy
There doesn’t exist a death penalty

This my friend
It’s called the end

No, its true

I'll just lay down
Give up my dirt crown
Closing my eyes
Getting free of my lies
Feel the darkness
Feel the loneliness

This my friend
It’s called the end

The last breath
The death
I never really cared
But now I’m really scared
Feeling fright
My old light… Out of sight
It’s funny in a way
The very last day
Yeah, we will all pass away
This my friend
Its called the end

This my friend
Its called the end
#2
the first verse was great. I didn't enjoy the 2nd verse at all really. The third was pretty good.

overall id give about a 7/10
#3
Quote by maccas666
the first verse was great. I didn't enjoy the 2nd verse at all really. The third was pretty good.

overall id give about a 7/10



I consider that pretty good..
The 2nd verse isn't my favorite neither, I've been trying many different versions and this just turned out to be my favorite of those.. Anyway, I'll work a bit more on it..
Thanks for the comment.!