#1
a short poem. enjoy


Did you ever feel
like reality wasn't real?
As if I'm here but nothing more.
I have a crystal glass case
for a tongue full of taste
and love is all it will ever be for.
#2
Quote by Solemn Silence
a short poem. enjoy


Did you ever feel
like reality wasn't real?
I like this, it makes me want to read more
As if I'm here but nothing more.
I'm a little confused because you start off talking to someone about them, but you talk about yourself here. I this would be better if you replaced "I'm" with "you're".
I have a crystal glass case
for a tongue full of taste
and love is all it will ever be for.
I'm also confused here about the "crystal glass case", but I like the rhyme here.

I think it's a good start.


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