#1
I'm doing English and there's an option for doing a Creative Writing Folio, which requires the pupil to show their ability at two seperate kinds of creative writing, choices being Self-Reflective Essays, Drama, Poetry and Prose. I'm doing Poetry as one (probably). The poems have to be interconnected in some way, so I thought I'd do some poems on my friends *insert giant "awwww"*, but am worried that the examiners will not "get" the poems as they do not know the subjects.

So, in order to test this theory, I will post one of the possibilities for entrants to the shortlist of possible folio pieces here, and see if my paranoid mind has been screwing with me, or guiding me.

Here's one

Readings

Tatooed sarcasm
Spat out and rifled towards
The pleb underlings.

Biting cleanly through
Pretence and lies and facade
To the honest shame.

Armour is hollow.
Mother, Father and Sister:
Open books to him.

Ok, crit away!!! And it's in haiku verse form, so I'm not really worried about flow, more about emphasis from quasi-enjambement.

And thanks to Carmel_l for her patience
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Joeymaxx
#2
Here's one:

Haikus are aweseome.
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refridgerator.

But in all seriousness, I think it's pretty good. I have a hard time understanding some of the words though.
#3
I like it. The examiners should get it. Nice work
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#4
But do you get a feel for the person? That's my worry
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I only do that on MSN, and I get many complaints about it.

F&F will have cyber sex with you on MSN. He's a bit handsy though.


I have become..... METACARPI!!!!

I wish


Joeymaxx
#5
I like it, but I don't understand the use of 'pleb' in the first stanza- you've used complex words and descriptions everywhere else, why have you chucked a colloqualism in there?

Is it satire? On second thoughts, yeah- that makes sense.

Which means, yes, I really like it. I'm sure the moderators will be impressed.
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#6
The pleb is how he views people - I love him like a brother but he's mean

And thankyou!!! You are a good person and shall enjoy a nice snack in the near future!
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I only do that on MSN, and I get many complaints about it.

F&F will have cyber sex with you on MSN. He's a bit handsy though.


I have become..... METACARPI!!!!

I wish


Joeymaxx
#7
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Here's one:

Haikus are aweseome.
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refridgerator.

But in all seriousness, I think it's pretty good. I have a hard time understanding some of the words though.



epic, im gona use that for english next semester
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