#1
Two little poem/songs I wrote a couple days ago in the late of night. Second one was taken out of something I was writing when thinking about LCD signs, but, whatever, who cares, here you go.

"Redsheen Cylinderbombs"

bubbles in the needle
say syringe do your trick
would'ja do your trick

been chasing an image in my head
but i havent moved for days
behind the curtain hides the light
behind my eyes, the rays

trouble in the vein
say son can you explain
would'ja please explain

mercury red and
alien mathematics
written in the arm of the
devil sodapop addicts

lost in the game
say man can you pull the trigger
would'ja pull the trigger
yeah, i'll pull the trigger

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"Lieutenant Loveless"

Hit a bathroom wall like a bungee cord thumps
To the nausea twist a warm heart jumps
you notice how worthless it just can be
degree in idiocracy and official heartbreak badge to boot
a black black eye turns blue blue blue
"this aint the last of me"
calls the soul from under your shoe

reflection of a lovesick officer in diluted waters
Arrestin' yourself for the sake of leavin her
In the company of toilet liquids,
the only ones who'll listen
while the reflux is having you wishin
you'd had a bullet left for a quick fixin

"Aint the way" they'd say
as you'll loosen the tie inbetween those shiverin shakes
memory shot like a smoking whirlpool
in a flotation raft with last words siftin at your feet like
like parabellum wordcraft

Bloodshot throat and stinging eyes
Make for another night on a looping rise
down a closing gate at a speeding stop
why don't'cha close the knot you fought to tie
in your throat like a swingin door
While you flush the cruiser lights on that marble floor

Red tide spillin on a broken nose shore
Vocal cords callin for anyone for anything
To end everything for nothing but the ringing ding
From the thrown cellphone in the back of your soul
That you stomped on the floor a million miles ago
Last edited by phelicks at Nov 18, 2007,
#2
I absolutely love the second one.
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#3
both are f_cken awsum love it man keep up the good work
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#4
They're really good. I love the first one.
"lost in the game
say man can you pull the trigger
would'ja pull the trigger
yeah, i'll pull the trigger" - thats awesome!


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Last edited by theneildeal at Nov 18, 2007,
#5
Thanks for the compliments, I wasn't expecting so many. I'm really inspired by Beck, RHCP, White Stripes and other creative bands like the such.. D: I'll write more, I suppose.
#6
yeah i can really see the 1st one being sung by Anthony Keidis cool man
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