#1
Verse 1

Blood stains the corn
It grows with death

Hung on the cross,
You'll take your final breath

The children of Gatlin
Play with sin

On your knees Outlander!
And join your kin

Beware the one
Behind the rows

In his damned gaze,
A fast death slows

Discovering your flesh,
wicked blades gleam

Scream, for your pain
Lies in no dream

Verse 2

Don't ponder your fate
You knew it would come

Blasphemous one,
Your soul grows numb

The sickles and knives
Prepare you for him

Black abyss awaits
Your light grows dim

On the strike of twelve
The corn wil feed

The fangs of a god
Will make you bleed

The children, they chant
Awaiting their lord

Death is their life
A fell demons horde


Thoughts? And +1 to anyone who knows what film this is based on
#2
I like the lyrics, but I don't like the way you've broken it up into two line stanzas.

It could maybe benefit from some darker imagery in there, there might not be enough description, but apart from that, good work.
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#3
Quote by rabidguitarist
I like the lyrics, but I don't like the way you've broken it up into two line stanzas.

It could maybe benefit from some darker imagery in there, there might not be enough description, but apart from that, good work.



Its just the way the song and guitar is structered. And I will probably change the lyrics up a bit to make it darker, thats a good idea