#1
Like all the great tales
Of white horses with men
Always fighting for justice
Always ready to defend
Like all the great tales
The kingdom has crumbled
Corruption, greed, treachory
Survivors left to mumble
Like all the great tales
The great have lost again
And now true rock is dead


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
Penatrating the mind


All the great kings have died
Now all that is remaining
Are the sounds they left behind
Which all are containing
The freedom of the mind
Some think im complaining
Some think im wasting time
So lets have a revalation
Lets start a revolution
Lets bring a resurrection
Cause I know the solution


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
Its now become our time


Though its spirit still lives on
It lost its momentum the motivation
Left to rememberem the innovation
Its now time for a seminar
Lets all pack another bowl
Its time to try and revive
The greatest musical soul
So grab hold your guitars
Create an everlasting noise
Our minds further out then mars
Cool electric sounds deploy


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And bring back the divine
Last edited by mindtrek at Dec 5, 2007,
#2
Epic


Pure, unfiltered epicness.
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#3
reminds me of the metal by tenacious d although urs is a bit more lyrically diverse nice work
#4
Nice, very nice. I like it.
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#5
verses are great, too much "rock 'n' roll this and that" in the choruses.
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#6
Now that is a song. Congrats on a good job! now, one thing was too much rock 'n' roll was being said, and i was a bit iffy on the line "Cool electric sounds deploy" but either than that (and remember, one person's opinion) I give you kudos on that one. How long did it take you to write it?

Maybe take a look at mine?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=716734
#7
thanks guys, yeah i thought the whole

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

part may be a bit much, but i think between every 2 lines a good pause with a good little riff or what have you could break it, though i cant play enough to really try it. I sat down twice yesterday writing the song which turned out much longer, then I just erased, moved and added some things and this is how it ended.
#8
Now this is what I like to see, real rock lyrics

Quote by mindtrek
Like many great tales
Of white horses with men
Always fighting for justice
Always ready to defend
Like many great tales
The kingdom has crumbled
Corruption, greed, treachery
Survivors left only to mumble
Like many great tales
The great have lost again
Now rock n roll is dead

Really great, could only better from a little polish that comes with putting it to song and seeing what works.


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

Powerful chorus, but I'm not really feeling the last line. It just sounds a bit weak in comparison.

The music has died
Now all that's remaining
Are the sounds left behind
All still bravely containing
The freedom of the mind
The song heard inside
Is truly one of a kind
So lets have a revelation
Lets start a revolution
Lets bring a resurrection
Cause I know the solution

Considering the chorus, I would find alternative to saying rock 'n roll so that you can keep it's power for that epic chorus. Overall it could use some more of that easier flow. I put in my best ideas for now.

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

same as before.

Though its spirit still lives on
It lost its momentum, the motivation
Left to remember the innovation
So its time for a seminar
For the death of rock n roll
Its time to try and revive
The greatest musical soul
So grab hold your guitars
Strike the everlasting chord
Our minds further out then the stars
What now is in hand, once was sword

My favorite verse. If you keep from using rock too much out of the chorus, it stands out more here. I just put in minor changes, purely by my own personal taste, to see if you like them.

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try
#9
For each part like:

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

I think you should take out the last Let our six strings ring

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
And give everyone a try

but keep playing the same thing as you would in the orginal way and just listen to the guitar in the part that I'd suggest you leave out
#10
Like many great tales
Of white horses with men
Always fighting for justice
Always ready to defend
Like many great tales
The kingdom has crumbled
Corruption, greed, treachory
Survivors left only to mumble
Like many great tales
The great have lost again
Now rock n roll is dead

ok, well wow, haha, this was awesome, talk about away to start a song, i love how it leads up to the final line, i can tell iam gonna like this song haha

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

i really like this alot, its great fits right in with your song, the only thing i can think of is maybe take out the last line, i could be wrong tho, just a thought,

Rock n roll has died
All that is remaining
Are the sounds left behind
Which all are containing
The freedom of the mind

amazing man, truly amazing, the flow is insane, and i love the message, nothing else to say but awesome, and really you speak the truth hear, i have said it many times, rock and roll has died somewhat,

Rock n roll has died
Was truly one of a kind
So lets have a revalation
Lets start a revolution
Lets bring a resurrection
Cause I know the solution

this verse was good, but not nearly as good as the other, for me at least, but still this is very good, the flow again is great,

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try


Though its spirit still lives on
It lost its momentum the motivation
Left to rememberer the innovation
So its time for a seminar
For the death of rock n roll
Its time to try and revive
The greatest musical soul

again pretty much the same as everything above, great work,

So grab hold your guitars
Create an everlasting noise
Our minds further out then mars
Cool electric sounds deploy

love it man,

Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And give everyone a try

man this song was amazing, i loved the message, and you told it in a perfect way, as you can tell i love this song, it may be because i total understand and feel the sameway as you, but regardless this song kicks ass, the flow was amazing there was nothing wrong with this song in any way, take a look at my song,
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=717403
#11
thanks for the crits, taking your suggestions I reworked some of the song... didnt edit original post for comparison reasons. dropped the rock and rolls except for the chorus. Also, changed the last line of chorus for each chorus part, maybe just one will work better not sure let me know.

Like all the great tales
Of white horses with men
Always fighting for justice
Always ready to defend
Like all the great tales
The kingdom has crumbled
Corruption, greed, treachory
Survivors left to mumble
Like all the great tales
The great have lost again
And now true rock is dead


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
Penatrating the mind


All the great kings have died
Now all that is remaining
Are the sounds they left behind
Which all are containing
The freedom of the mind
Some think im complaining
Some think im wasting time
So lets have a revalation
Lets start a revolution
Lets bring a resurrection
Cause I know the solution


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
Its now become the time


Though its spirit still lives on
It lost its momentum the motivation
Left to rememberem the innovation
Its now time for a seminar
Lets all pack another bowl
Its time to try and revive
The greatest musical soul
So grab hold your guitars
Create an everlasting noise
Our minds further out then mars
Cool electric sounds deploy


Let our six strings ring
For rock n roll has died
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll we'll revive
Let our six strings ring
Rock n roll can survive
Let our six strings ring
And bring back the divine
Last edited by mindtrek at Dec 2, 2008,
#14
ha thanks man. this is one of the first I posted here awhile ago, was quite surprised to see someone comment on it. Thanks again